Sunday, November 2, 2014

Risky Business Rough Draft

          Being a teenager isn't always easy. It's the stage in our life where you're not technically a kid or and adult and you start to explore the world around you. One of the major things that occur when you' become a teen is relationships. Relationships open a whole new world of endless possibilities to teens. Although sometimes these relationships become violent and can become a dangerous situation putting the teens at risk. Teen dating violence is an issue that does have some positives impacts but mostly negative because it causes teens to have mental and physical health issues and can lead teens to engage in illegal substances.

        Being in a domestic relationship can mentally affect you in many ways. In some ways it can be good. You become mentally stronger from recovering and overcoming the situation, but most of the time it leads to depression or suicide. According to sciencedaily.com, females who had experience teen dating violence reported increased depression symptoms. Being abused by anyone leaves a permanent scar in your mind and your body making it impossible to forget. The memory can be replayed over and over in your mind causing one to become depressed which leads to the thought of suicide. According to suicide.org, one in every four women who were victims of domestic violence attempt suicide. Not only does being in an abusive relationship hurts physically, physcologically, it can lead to your death.

          Physical health is always at risk in a violent relationship. According to loveisrepsect.org, one in 10 high school students has been purposely hit, slapped, or physically hurt by a boyfriend or girlfriend. Abuse can varied in many ways. A push or shove doesn't as have much of an impact as a punch but is still abuse. It's never okay to abuse to someone is taken as serious crime. Nearly 1.5 million high school students nationwide experience physical abuse from a dating partner in a single year. Although, some people may find it benefitting because it allows the person to learn to defend themselves, there's no excuse for any abuse.

        Teen dating violence has often lead to teens engaging in illegal substances. After getting out of a violent relationship, teens are still scared and look to things like drugs and alcohol to help. According to WebMD Health News, females and males who reported dating violence as teens are most likely to smoke and use marijuana more than other teens that have not experienced dating violence. Most teens use these substances to help relieve the physcological pain of their abusive relationship. According to loveisrespect.org, most victims are at higher risk for substance abuse. Although, some people could see this as a good thing because it does help them to overcome the situation but taking part in illegal activities isn't a good thing.

        Teen dating violence is a worldwide issue and should be taken seriously because of it's long-lasting effects it has on a victim. It can easily cause physical & mental health issues and lead teens to illegal substance to help the pain. Teens should be careful and have healthy relationships that can benefit them as they become adults. Abuse and domestic violence should taken very seriously and never happen to any person because there are no positive effects. Teen dating violence leaves

3 comments:

  1. That was an excellent story! I just feel as if instead of sounding like a robot and just add information put kind of like your opinion and like add for creativity! But you had a lot of good information keep working!

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  2. I like that you put a lot of evidence in your paragraphs. The thing I would change is instead of going fact after fact try to give scenarios of what could actually happen if they were in an abusive relationship. Other then that great start!

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  3. MS(3-)YOUR INTRO COULD BE A LOT STRONGER. DISCUSS MORE SO THAT TRANSITIONING FROM TOPIC TO ISSUE TO THESIS IS A LOT SMOOTHER AND NOT AS RUSHED. YOU HAVE SOME GOOD EVIDENCE/STATISTICS MAKE SURE YOU CITE THEM OR QUOTE THEM IF TAKEN WORD FOR WORD. ALSO DISCUSS IT A BIT MORE, DISCUSSION/IDEAS SEEM A BIT RUSHED BECAUSE IT IS ISN'T EXPLAINED ENOUGH. ALSO COUNTER ARGUMENT!!!

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